Week 7 Story: Kintaro from Outer Space
Since I read "The Adventures of Kintaro" for this week's reading and my storybook is centered on Kintaro, my blog story this week will also be the first story ("Origin") to my storybook: "Kintaro from Outer Space." I hope you enjoy!
Long ago, there lived a poor orange farmer on Mount Ashigara, Japan. He worked long and hard just to make ends meet for his wife and himself. Sadly, the couple was unable to have any children although they'd always wanted a son to help them with labor in the fields, especially as they grew older.One evening after a hard day's work, the sun went down, and the farmer noticed heavy storm clouds rolling in quickly. As he scurried to gather his equipment and get out of the rain, he was startled by a bright flash of lightning accompanied by earth-shaking thunder. Immediately, another bright streak in the sky caught his attention, but it wasn't lightning this time. It appeared to be a shooting star with a distinct golden aura. When the shooting star did not fade away but instead grew larger and brighter in appearance, the farmer began to worry. It seemed to be heading right for the top of Mount Ashigara.
As the outer space object landed , it shook the mountain all the way down to the base where the farmer stood. The rain quickly subsided only a minute after it had begun. The farmer was very curious to know what had landed at the top of the mountain; however, it was getting dark and he was tired from a long day's work, so he decided to get some rest and investigate later.
The following morning, instead of going straight to work in the field, the farmer made the hour long hike up Mount Ashigara. When he arrived at the top, he couldn't believe his eyes. He was looking at a large, smooth watermelon-shaped meteorite - but this meteorite wasn't any regular chunk of space rock - it looked to be made of solid gold. Tears of joy began rolling down his face. He would be rich.
The farmer was sure the gold rock must weigh at least 100 pounds and he'd need a wheelbarrow to carry it down the mountain, but, to his surprise, it was only slightly heavy as if it were hollowed out inside. Thus he was able to carry it all the way back. Upon arriving home, his wife was ecstatic to see what her husband found. They talked all day long about what they were going to do with their newfound fortune. She wanted to buy several fancy kimonos made of the finest fabric in Japan, whereas he wanted to hire others so he wouldn't have to work so hard in the field every day. They decided to begin spending the gold the next day and kept it locked away in a safe for the night.
Because the couple had always wanted a son, they decided to keep the baby. They named him "Kintaro" meaning "golden boy."
Image Source. An orange farm by a tall mountain. |
As the outer space object landed , it shook the mountain all the way down to the base where the farmer stood. The rain quickly subsided only a minute after it had begun. The farmer was very curious to know what had landed at the top of the mountain; however, it was getting dark and he was tired from a long day's work, so he decided to get some rest and investigate later.
Image Source. The farmer found a giant golden nugget |
The farmer was sure the gold rock must weigh at least 100 pounds and he'd need a wheelbarrow to carry it down the mountain, but, to his surprise, it was only slightly heavy as if it were hollowed out inside. Thus he was able to carry it all the way back. Upon arriving home, his wife was ecstatic to see what her husband found. They talked all day long about what they were going to do with their newfound fortune. She wanted to buy several fancy kimonos made of the finest fabric in Japan, whereas he wanted to hire others so he wouldn't have to work so hard in the field every day. They decided to begin spending the gold the next day and kept it locked away in a safe for the night.
The next morning, the farmer awoke to find his safe completely destroyed. He immediately assumed a thief must have broken in and stolen his prized possession, but there was no way a thief could have mutilated the strong metal safe in the way it had been mutilated. Furthermore, he noticed the gold was still laying nearby, but it too was shattered in pieces. He was shocked and confused. Searching around the rest of his house for any clues to what may have happened during the night, he once again could not believe his eyes when he got to the kitchen.
Crawling around on the kitchen floor was a baby, eating some food the farmer had accidentally left out the night before. The baby was as small as a newborn, yet he was stronger than any child the farmer had laid eyes on, and it was already eating on its own. "Could it be..." the farmer said out loud, "that this baby was sent by the gods in the golden meteorite?" The farmer nearly expected the baby to answer yes or no himself, but it could not speak. He just looked up, smiled, and giggled at the old man, who called for his wife to come see the miracle. The two stared in awe at the baby for quite some time. It was well behaved, strong, and learned very quickly.
Because the couple had always wanted a son, they decided to keep the baby. They named him "Kintaro" meaning "golden boy."
To be continued...
Author's Notes: Kintaro's origin has been told several ways in Japanese folklore. My favorite origin story involved a red dragon sending a clap of thunder which impregnated the yamauba (mountain witch) of Mount Ashigara. From this version I have taken the location (Mount Ashigara) and the presence of thunder for my story, but instead of the red dragon and the yamauba, I add my own outer space touch to it. I was also heavily inspired by another Japanese folklore which I like, Momotaro (peach boy). In this tale, an old couple who always wanted a son find a giant peach one day, and inside of that peach is Momotaro. I decided to create similar characters in my story out of the farmer and the wife, and give them a son via a big golden nugget (since Kintaro means "golden boy"). Finally, a small detail but I chose the farmer to have an orange farm because my uncle in Okinawa, Japan has an orange farm himself! It lies on a mountain as well with a beautiful view of the sky, and my uncle has told me many times he has seen strange things like UFOs in the sky. So, in some way, this story is inspired by my real life as well.
Image Source. The farmer and his wife decide to raise Kintaro. |
Hi Chris, I really enjoyed your telling of this story! Your choice of vocab and methods of describing things throughout the story are very enjoyable and don't get old. I loved how the egg ended up being a child and the family then chose to raise it, but I wished that we could've heard more about what the child from the sky was like. The pacing was done very well, and it did not feel like one part of the story dragged on for longer than needed. Did you consider fleshing the story out at all? It did feel slightly abrupt that the ending was just the child being raised by the couple with no further details. How else could you have made the baby seem special besides being born from a golden egg? One minor detail that bugged me was the fact that some farmers out in the mountains had a safe large enough to hold a giant golden egg, which could definitely be tweaked in future stories.
ReplyDeleteHi Chris! I thought this story was a really interesting and creative way to retell the origin story of Kintaro in your own way. I especially like how he came in a chunk of gold, since his name means "golden boy." I also like that you added touches from your personal life to the story—it makes it feel like more of your own story than just a retelling. Since I hadn't read the original story, I thought at first that some type of monster like a dragon might be inside the gold!
ReplyDeleteFirst off I want to say that I love the layout of your story and how there are pictures throughout it to go with the story. It is the first week story that I have read like that. I really enjoyed your story and loved the things you kept and the things that you changed/added to it. When it ended I really wanted it to continue and read about when the little golden boy growing up.
ReplyDeleteJust came from the part two of this story, and I like it so much! Haha, I can't believe a baby really just popped out of a golden egg that fell from the sky. This gives big Disney's Hercules vibes. So, they just vibed with it? They didn't worry that the baby would bring bad luck or anything? I wonder if the egg wasn't golden if they would have felt differently.
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